Okay whatever. Why are you here asking questions then?
All you were asked to do is either rewrite the STORY so someone could help you or edit it and use paragraphs ..they are your friends. But while I'm at it....learn what a run on sentence is and don't do it. I value my eyes and that mess you posted was a blurr.
Who said we didn't care about posts? We just care about our eye sight more. You need to yourself in check. No one here has to give you anything.

