Perhaps we're arguing symantics. IRLJ 3.1 (b) requires that the response to a discovery request include: "a copy of the citing officer's sworn statement". It looks to me as though you're saying there should be BOTH a RADAR affidavit AND a "sworn statement". But, as far as I can remember (and, please, take a look at
this thread,
this thread or
this thread, as quick examples), not one single case has been presented in these forums containing BOTH a RADAR affidavit AND a separate "sworn statement" (of course, I'm old and my memory is not what it used to be -- and never has been! LOL!). The so-called RADAR affidavit contains the ENTIRETY of the officer's testimonial statement. So, in the cases I've linked to, and dozens of others, the "RADAR affidavit" is, indeed, the officer's "sworn statement".
Look at your own proposed affidavit. Once the holes are filled, there would be NO NEED for a separate "sworn statement". I like Carl's idea of a "comments" section.
Barry